Tuesday, September 15, 2015

Cranky Author Reviews: My Amnesia Girl-Spoiled Brats by Marissa Machan


I don't know about this book...
the beginning for me was hard to understand it seemed to jump around a lot and it was a little confusing for me that you jumped from the Dad's perspective to Vanessa's...

I tried so hard to love this book but I just felt it was lacking something... some parts of the story were good and I did like the way he fell for her head over heals from the start. 

It was nice when they meet and he is charmed despite her behavior and then she falls into the ocean and gets Amnesia and he tells her she's his wife. It was cute at times and a little bit more like a young teen romance than an adult romance. Maybe ages 13-16 would be a good fit for this book...although the faded out sex scenes might be a bit advanced for 13 would fit nicely with 14+ year olds.

I do believe that it needs a bit of polish in order to clean up some of the start at least the first six chapters or so because it was jumping around from one perspective to another. The book wasn't awful it had potential but it just needs someone to go back and eliminate some of the jumping around from head to head and the dialogue in some places needs work. 

It wasn't a terrible read and what other reviewers where saying is true that the romance part was sweet but not really melt your heart good. 

I do think that Michael's thoughts seemed much younger than his age and Vanessa's thoughts were sometimes not expressed well. 

but getting back to the plot...
 She finds out after months that he's not her husband and that she was rich they make up and she is preggers. He asks her to marry him and they end up with a HEA

All in all I give it a NSEPE or 3.5-stars because I found a lot of the enjoyment was lost in that first part because I was confused in several places...

Buy links: 
Amazon US/Spoiled Brats
Amazon UK/Spoiled Brats

About the Author:
Marissa Marchan is a wife, mother of two, and grandmother of three. She is also a case manager at the District Attorney's Office Child Support Division in Las Vegas, Nevada for nineteen years establishing, enforcing, and modifying child support orders. She is the author of two children's books, A Magical and Inspiring Story: A Boy Named Ray Book 1, and A Magical and Inspiring Story: And Then There's Haley Book 2. She is still working on the third and final book in the series, And Kayla Makes Three.

She discovered her passion for writing fiction, and her inspiration for the story came from her then-eight-year-old grandson, Ray Angelo. When her sister passed away a few years ago, it's been a constant struggle as she suffered extreme feelings of bewilderment, anxiety, and depression for a very long time. Ray Angelo gave her the strength, courage, and inspiration to move on with her life.

Recently, she ventured into the wonderful world of Romance novels after reading her first romance book while at the doctor's office. She wanted it to be an exciting, yet sweet, series, concentrating more on the wanting and the conflict of getting there, hence, A Spoiled Brats Romance Diaries book series was born.

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